Holding tightly to a support rope he's making his making his way to the top. The wind was blowing strongly he was worried because the iron structure was shaking. his heart was pounding he was so scared that he could fall.
This is a great picture! I wonder what is at the top? I like that you started using some show not tell towards the end, but maybe next time try to use more descriptive language throughout your writing.
Kia Ora Shontayne. My name is Taleisha and I am a year 8 attending Paihia School. I was looking through your blog and I found your writing piece about the man who walked up 10,000 ft. I like how you described what the man was feeling. It must have been really nerve wracking for the man to be so high up! My legs would probably turn to jelly if I was that high as I am not a fan of heights. Did you know why he was climbing that tower? Was their something at the top?
Holding tightly to a support rope he's making his making his way to the top. The wind was blowing strongly he was worried because the iron structure was shaking. his heart was pounding he was so scared that he could fall.
This is a great picture! I wonder what is at the top? I like that you started using some show not tell towards the end, but maybe next time try to use more descriptive language throughout your writing.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Shontayne. My name is Taleisha and I am a year 8 attending Paihia School. I was looking through your blog and I found your writing piece about the man who walked up 10,000 ft. I like how you described what the man was feeling. It must have been really nerve wracking for the man to be so high up! My legs would probably turn to jelly if I was that high as I am not a fan of heights. Did you know why he was climbing that tower? Was their something at the top?
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